Identify the problem with the following sentence.
Thelma was the person who wrote the sales manual originally in the beginning.use of passive voice
wordiness
inconsistent style

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The problem of the above sentence is the USE OF WORDINESS.

"Originally in the beginning" is redundant. The sentence could simply be written as:

Thelma was the person who wrote the sales manual. 

This means that Thelma was the author of the sales manual.